ext_8968 ([identity profile] san-grail.livejournal.com) wrote in [personal profile] synapticjava 2005-08-07 06:54 am (UTC)

Nice start!

This is really great, you've done brilliantly by showing, rather than telling, and leaving it at a subtle layer of depression that is all the more realistic and dark than omg!, poor-abused!xander, with the nasty friends!
Instead, it's just... real.

You do lose touch with people at college, and it's not deliberate, it's just missing out on the shared experiences. And oooh... again, his home, parents - brilliantly done.

Oh, and yes. The dialogue is excellent as well.
:)

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